Monday, 5 March 2012

Ethan's 100wc - week 22

“Look, the temple Agada!”
We had made it. The temple had been attacked, so it was easy to get in.
We leapt past spikes, traps, allsorts.
We finally made it.
“The diamond, it’s ours!”
We picked up the gigantic diamond, got on the container, and got launched through the temple top.
“We made it, and-Huh?”
Aliens abducted our diamond! And they sent a massive ball of bones to chase us!
But then it turned into a monster! A giant pirate skeleton, that is. It ran after us and swung its giant bone sword, and it killed us both. THE END…

By Ethan - Ash Class.


  1. Caroline Hardman (Team 100WC)5 March 2012 at 16:43

    I love the way your story is packed full of excitment and adventure Ethan - my heart was pounding by the end! Your short sentences really help to set the mood and keep the pace fast - but I like the way you've thrown in a few longer ones for variety too. Great job - I look forward to reading more of your 100WC stories!

  2. Isaac the Badger6 March 2012 at 17:08

    Cheery ending, Ethan!

  3. I really enjoyed reading your 100 Word Challenge Ethan, well done. Starting with dialogue is a clever way to start your story as it immediately hooks the reader in.

    Mrs Stones - Miriam Lord Primary, Bradford

  4. hi it is me becky edwards


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