I walked into dusty room. The crooked door slammed behind me. I took another step forward; the light flickered in the bitter cold. Then I heard a creepy footstep step towards me, I took the slightest step back. The sign creaking in the freezing wind outside. Suddenly, a huge rocking horse fell off the dusty stool window. My heart started to thump rapidly. I heard another footstep. “Who’s there?” I whispered. Then the voice reply back to me, it asked, “How can I help you?” in a very curt voice. I took a small step back and sped out of the creaky door.
By Molly - Ash Class.
Another super 100wc, Molly :-) Keep them coming!
ReplyDeleteWell done Molly. You have used a lot of descriptive language here and not been afraid to use some imaginative vocabulary. Have a think about using alternative verbs instead of step so you don't repeat it too often.
ReplyDeleteKeep up your good work.
Mrs P
Hi Mrs Prior & Maple,
DeleteThanks for commenting and i'm very glad you liked my work!
Thanks Mr K! I will keep them coming, don't you worry!
ReplyDeleteoh my lord that was ace i could never write anything near that.:-]
ReplyDeleteYou could Lottie, belive me!
Deletethis is a great 100 word challenge molly and i`m the same I will keep on sending Mr K my 100 word challenges to!
ReplyDeleteGreat work Molls, was it a ghost?
ReplyDeleteMolly,
ReplyDeleteSuper paragraph for this 100WC! It was very descriptive and engaging. I so enjoyed reading this. Good show!
this was amzing Molly!!! The things i loved was: bitter cold, creaky door,slightest step back,thump rapidly.
ReplyDeleteIt made me have shivers down my back! Ceep writting and can we be blog buddys? Jessamy :)