Wow Liam! Its amazing that the scientist had made a chocolate ray, that can turn normal rabbits into chocolate rabbits! You could live on chocolate! Great Job!
Lovely!! What a wonderful imagination you have. Just a small point to consider: make sure you always proof read your work out loud so you know it makes sense to the reader Well Done Mr Overton (100WC Team)
Liam, your story about the rabbit was an awesome story. Just like you I love being creative. You are creative because you have a very creative story about the rabbit. Why did you want to write about a scientist who turned a real rabbit into a chocolate rabbit and then made his creation? I love your story by the way!
I love your story Liam, great names in the story (e.g David!) great work! are you going to carry it on???
ReplyDeletei love you 100 wc this week but are you going to carry it on !!!!!!!!!!!?????????????
ReplyDeleteI like your's 100 word challenge is were creative ;)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comments guys
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Its OK!
DeleteIt reminded me of something from Phineus and Ferb - very Dr Doofenshmurtz!
ReplyDeleteLovely idea, and good word choices really bring it to life.
thanks, yeah it does remind me of that too!
DeleteWow Liam! Its amazing that the scientist had made a chocolate ray, that can turn normal rabbits into chocolate rabbits! You could live on chocolate! Great Job!
ReplyDeleteLovely!!
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful imagination you have.
Just a small point to consider: make sure you always proof read your work out loud so you know it makes sense to the reader
Well Done
Mr Overton
(100WC Team)
Liam, your story about the rabbit was an awesome story. Just like you I love being creative. You are creative because you have a very creative story about the rabbit. Why did you want to write about a scientist who turned a real rabbit into a chocolate rabbit and then made his creation? I love your story by the way!
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