This is a good question Emeila. Are you real? Am I real? Is there a real person reading and commenting on your work? Well, as far as I'm concerned I am real, and this is a really good piece of work. I think Charlotte has a point about your tenses being mixed, but that's something to work on. Your descriptive words show excellent choices.
Wow Emelia- I really love the fact that you have made it very mysterious at the end, asking loads of questions. I don't know if you are real? Am I real? Who knows....
Hi Emeila it is fabulouse mabe you should keep it to one tense. But I love your range of adverbs. Charlotte=]
ReplyDeleteWOW! I like the way you leave a question at the end of a sentence, great work!
ReplyDeleteThis is a good question Emeila. Are you real? Am I real? Is there a real person reading and commenting on your work? Well, as far as I'm concerned I am real, and this is a really good piece of work. I think Charlotte has a point about your tenses being mixed, but that's something to work on. Your descriptive words show excellent choices.
ReplyDeleteWow Emelia- I really love the fact that you have made it very mysterious at the end, asking loads of questions. I don't know if you are real? Am I real? Who knows....
ReplyDeleteKeep it up!
Thankyou for all the great comments!!
ReplyDeleteWell done Emelia! I like the way you wrote in the present tense. Also I love the way you ended it with a couple of questions, very good!
ReplyDeleteA few mistakes here and there, but nothing much at all!
Very Good Work!