Friday, 23 March 2012

Emily's 5 sentence challenge.

One day I went to the country side in the summer holidays. It was quite old and quiet there was barely anyone there. Then the next day flew by me and my sister went down to the lake and we got some fish. There were two beautiful white swans. There where lots of colourful flowers there were pink ones, red ones, yellow ones and white.

By Emily - Ash Class.


  1. I like the way you use the word 'barely' in that sentence, it works well! Some other great describing words too!

    Mabye next time you could add a comma in and mabye if your feeling brave use ask a question to the reader?

    A fabulous piece of writing, well done!

  2. Emily - you have put together some brilliant sentences. I actually think you will be ready to have a go at 100WC soon! Well done!


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