Friday, 23 March 2012

Chloe's 100wc - week 25

I gently walked into the silent library. I looked around, but no-one was there. I thought I was meant to be meeting someone. So I slowly walked to the door, but suddenly the door slammed close. I didn’t know what to do. “Aaaaaaahhhh!” Then a creepy voice asked, “How can I help you!” The voice was croaky and I didn’t even try to go to the door, because who knew what the voice would say next! Then suddenly a face appeared in a mirror! “Aaaaahhhhh!” “What are you doing in MY library?” I sprinted round the library. What would happen next…

By Chloe - Ash Class.


  1. A lovely 100wc entry, Chloe :-)
    Keep up the good work!

  2. thank you mr kenyon
    your the only one who has commented one my 100 word challenge because the 100 word challenge team has not commened yet

  3. :-( I shall contact the 100wc to let them know - there's been a few of our 100wc entries that haven't had any comments from Team 100wc this week and that's very disappointing - your work is terrific and deserves to be read! Mr K :-)

  4. thank you
    I wrote a comment for Mollys 100 word challenge but I don`t think you got it should I write it again to her?

    1. I think it's on there now - didn't approve it straight away as I was cooking dinner! :-)

  5. Well done Chloe. What a scary situation. I wonder who the voice belonged to? You build the tension well. Try varying your sentence starters by starting with a verb or an adverb.

    Thanks for joining the 100 WC.

    Clare Powell (Team 100WC)

  6. Well done Chloe! I like some of the describing words in there like 'silently and 'slowly'. Also I like the verbs in there too, (e.g slammed and sprinted) :)

    Maybe next time you could add in a semi-colon?

    One of the best I've read, well done! :) :)

  7. That was the most cool adventure @ the library. -Khatira & Jayden

  8. I love the story.

  9. Whoah! That was pretty scary and creative. I can't wait to see what happens next.

    Surrey, BC, Canada


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