Jack, I'm really pleased with your 100wc this week - your writing is improving so much! This story grabbed my attention from the very first sentence (being woken up by the thunder and lightning - great idea!) and you kept this going all the way through - well done!
Also you've lots of 'ly' adverbs to help paint a picture of what's going on for your reader - fab! :-) Mr K
Hello, Jack. What a great story. The idea of a challenge turning out to be a dream is a great twist in your story. I particularly like that you are rescuing your parents. That should connect to many readers--our parents do so much for us, saving them from a scary dragon is the least we can do for them. Keep up the great work!
Jack, I'm really pleased with your 100wc this week - your writing is improving so much! This story grabbed my attention from the very first sentence (being woken up by the thunder and lightning - great idea!) and you kept this going all the way through - well done!
ReplyDeleteAlso you've lots of 'ly' adverbs to help paint a picture of what's going on for your reader - fab! :-)
Mr K
thanks
ReplyDeleteHello, Jack. What a great story. The idea of a challenge turning out to be a dream is a great twist in your story. I particularly like that you are rescuing your parents. That should connect to many readers--our parents do so much for us, saving them from a scary dragon is the least we can do for them. Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteMrs. Stading (Team 100WC)