Charlotte - I really enjoyed your 100wc this week. You used the prompt very imaginatively, showing us a different side of dragons!
You've also tried really hard to use commas to mark out the different parts of your sentences, although sometimes you might need something a bit stronger - maybe a dash or semi-colon (we can look at those in class).
Hi Charlotte, thank you for entering your 100wc, I really enjoyed reading your work. I really liked some of the descriptive words you used and your use of speech - not many 100wc's use speech. Keep up the great work and I hope you keep entering the 100wc. Mrs McGuinnity (Team 100WC)
Wow Charlotte this is amazing! A dragon-minder sounds like a good job to have! I like that idea and crying for joy instead of crying for pain! What a fabulous 100 WC, Well Done! From Ellie at www.6d.highlawnprimary.net
I really enjoyed your story, Charlotte. That was a great twist - that the dragon was crying for joy! And how sweet - to have a baby dragon. I wonder whether dragon-minding is a very difficult job? You might need fire-proof clothes! Well done!
Charlotte - I really enjoyed your 100wc this week. You used the prompt very imaginatively, showing us a different side of dragons!
ReplyDeleteYou've also tried really hard to use commas to mark out the different parts of your sentences, although sometimes you might need something a bit stronger - maybe a dash or semi-colon (we can look at those in class).
A super effort :-)
Mr K
Hi Charlotte, thank you for entering your 100wc, I really enjoyed reading your work. I really liked some of the descriptive words you used and your use of speech - not many 100wc's use speech.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great work and I hope you keep entering the 100wc.
Mrs McGuinnity (Team 100WC)
Wow Charlotte this is amazing! A dragon-minder sounds like a good job to have! I like that idea and crying for joy instead of crying for pain! What a fabulous 100 WC, Well Done! From Ellie at www.6d.highlawnprimary.net
ReplyDeleteThis is a great 100 word challenge Charlotte, a dragon-mider is a great idea
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story, Charlotte. That was a great twist - that the dragon was crying for joy! And how sweet - to have a baby dragon. I wonder whether dragon-minding is a very difficult job? You might need fire-proof clothes! Well done!
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