Wow Ethan- I love the fact that at the start theres no sign of it being a drama act! And then at the end you reveal it, I like that! And I love the way that you've made it a bit dramatic when he finds out that the indulgent chocolate bunny rabbit had melted! Good Job, I enjoyed reading it!
Great job, Ethan! The dialogue brings out the emotions of the people really well. Somehow, the chocolate becomes more real this way. Keep up the excellent work, Ethan! Kind regards, Diethild
Wow Ethan- I love the fact that at the start theres no sign of it being a drama act! And then at the end you reveal it, I like that! And I love the way that you've made it a bit dramatic when he finds out that the indulgent chocolate bunny rabbit had melted! Good Job, I enjoyed reading it!
ReplyDeleteWhat an unsual 100wc! I like the fact that its mostly speech! Brilliant describing words of the chocolate - Belgian, creamy goodness, mmmm!
ReplyDeleteTry not to go over the top with the speech, some of the time I didn't know who was speeking!
Other than that its A-MAZ-ING!
Great job, Ethan!
ReplyDeleteThe dialogue brings out the emotions of the people really well. Somehow, the chocolate becomes more real this way.
Keep up the excellent work, Ethan!
Kind regards,
Diethild
Thank you for commenting on my post about Mistakes, Ethan. It meant a lot to me.
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