Hi Issac I realy enjoyed reading your 100wc it had good punctuation and strong adjectives. I would not want to be trampled down by one of those heards. well done
This is a great description, Isaac. Even without the drawing I would have been able to picture this animal in my head. I really enjoyed listening to you reading it as well.
Hello Issac, what a great idea for an animal. You have managed to include lots of detail about how your animal is adapted to live in it's environment in just 100 words. Excellent. Your reading brought your writing to life and I like the picture too! to make your writing even better can you think of some different ways to start your sentences other than ;they' and 'it'? Keep writing!
Mr K, you could of put my neat version on!!!
ReplyDeleteAh, oops! I wanted the picture of the Grorseowake on there! :-)
DeleteHi Issac I realy enjoyed reading your 100wc it had good punctuation and strong adjectives. I would not want to be trampled down by one of those heards. well done
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What fabulous animals you have invented love the sound effects versions!!
ReplyDeleteThis is a great description, Isaac. Even without the drawing I would have been able to picture this animal in my head. I really enjoyed listening to you reading it as well.
ReplyDeleteHello Issac, what a great idea for an animal. You have managed to include lots of detail about how your animal is adapted to live in it's environment in just 100 words. Excellent. Your reading brought your writing to life and I like the picture too!
ReplyDeleteto make your writing even better can you think of some different ways to start your sentences other than ;they' and 'it'?
Keep writing!