I love your 100 word challinge I lovd reading it but one thing you forgot to do is start your sentencs with a capital letter. Great work carry on writing
Great work Amber, it's lovely to see a handwritten 100WC. Your handwriting is lovely as is your picture. You have clearly thought hard about all the different things your creature can do. Remember to think about using exciting vocabulary at the start of sentences. Keep up the good work.
Hello Amber, what a beautifully written piece for the 100WC.You described various things that your creature could do as well as what it looked like. Try not to repeat words like very- instead use a more exciting adjective or include a simile to make the description shine . Keep on blogging :)
Hi Amber,I really enjoyed reading your 100wc this week! You have described what your animal can do very well, I could picture your Eltiger doing all of them!
Plus your handwriting is amazingly neat, I wish I had handwriting like you!
Just one thing to remember- Don't lead in on capital letters! But other than that a fantasic 100wc! :-)
hi this is very weird because you will never geuss what my name is amber to i ga to moorlands junoir school & in yr5 loved your story from amber malcolm
Being chosen for this week's Showcase is quite an achievement. I was very impressed when I saw not only the neatness and quality of your writing but also the beautiful picture.
Hello Amber
ReplyDeleteI love your 100 word challinge I lovd reading it but one thing you forgot to do is start your sentencs with a capital letter. Great work carry on writing
Hello Amber,
ReplyDeleteI loved you 100wc but you forgot to star with a capital letter because you have done my instead of My but you have and great animal name i loved it.
Great work Amber, it's lovely to see a handwritten 100WC. Your handwriting is lovely as is your picture. You have clearly thought hard about all the different things your creature can do. Remember to think about using exciting vocabulary at the start of sentences.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work.
Hello Amber, what a beautifully written piece for the 100WC.You described various things that your creature could do as well as what it looked like. Try not to repeat words like very- instead use a more exciting adjective or include a simile to make the description shine . Keep on blogging :)
ReplyDeleteHi Amber,I really enjoyed reading your 100wc this week! You have described what your animal can do very well, I could picture your Eltiger doing all of them!
ReplyDeletePlus your handwriting is amazingly neat, I wish I had handwriting like you!
Just one thing to remember- Don't lead in on capital letters! But other than that a fantasic 100wc! :-)
thank you molly
ReplyDeleteNo Problem x
Deletehi this is very weird because you will never geuss what my name is amber to i ga to moorlands junoir school & in yr5 loved your story from amber malcolm
DeleteCongratulations, Amber!
ReplyDeleteBeing chosen for this week's Showcase is quite an achievement. I was very impressed when I saw not only the neatness and quality of your writing but also the beautiful picture.
@RossMannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher, NSW, Australia
thanck you Amber I go on your blog
ReplyDeleteAmber, your Eletiger is pretty cool. Why did you pick to write about an Eletiger? I love your story! :D
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