Saturday, 21 April 2012

Callum's 100wc - week 27

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  1. Hi Callum - I really enjoyed reading this 100wc - how naughty of your mum to warn you St George might chop your head off!

    My favourite part was the first paragraph: it was witty and really grabbed my attention. The bit you could perhaps look at again is the second paragraph - how might you improve it?

    Already looking forward to your next 100wc!
    Mr K :-)

  2. Charlotte r ash4 May 2012 at 16:21

    Hi Callum, I love your piece of writing it is very different to some of the other ones I heard. I also like your pharagraugh one where you used some gripping words.

    I also liked it because you adedd humor but not to much, a very good 100 wc.



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