Hi Callum - I really enjoyed reading this 100wc - how naughty of your mum to warn you St George might chop your head off!
My favourite part was the first paragraph: it was witty and really grabbed my attention. The bit you could perhaps look at again is the second paragraph - how might you improve it?
Already looking forward to your next 100wc! Mr K :-)
Hi Callum, I love your piece of writing it is very different to some of the other ones I heard. I also like your pharagraugh one where you used some gripping words.
I also liked it because you adedd humor but not to much, a very good 100 wc.
Hi Callum - I really enjoyed reading this 100wc - how naughty of your mum to warn you St George might chop your head off!
ReplyDeleteMy favourite part was the first paragraph: it was witty and really grabbed my attention. The bit you could perhaps look at again is the second paragraph - how might you improve it?
Already looking forward to your next 100wc!
Mr K :-)
Hi Callum, I love your piece of writing it is very different to some of the other ones I heard. I also like your pharagraugh one where you used some gripping words.
ReplyDeleteI also liked it because you adedd humor but not to much, a very good 100 wc.
Charlotte