Monday 7 May 2012

Liam's 100wc - week 29:

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4 comments:

  1. Liam - this is an excellent 100wc which I really enjoyed reading. You used the prompt in an imaginative way and also used heaps of descriptive language - well done!
    Mr K :-)

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  2. I agree with Mr K! How did you use this prompt so imaginatively!? Also some great language like Mr K said! Well done!

    Just a few things though:
    You forgot a full-stop at the end of your story and a few spelling mistakes.

    Other than that a fabulous piece of writing! :)

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  3. Hi Liam! I loved your story. It was very imaginative, and I could just picture the Professor's excitement as he plugged in the machine he had been working on for so long.
    Your writing is nice and neat too! Well done!

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  4. Liam, I agree with all the other comments, this was a great 100wc. You used some super description but I also liked the way you used commas within your sentences - well done!
    Keep up the great work :-)
    Mrs McGuinnity (Team 100wc)

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