Liam - this is an excellent 100wc which I really enjoyed reading. You used the prompt in an imaginative way and also used heaps of descriptive language - well done! Mr K :-)
Hi Liam! I loved your story. It was very imaginative, and I could just picture the Professor's excitement as he plugged in the machine he had been working on for so long. Your writing is nice and neat too! Well done!
Liam, I agree with all the other comments, this was a great 100wc. You used some super description but I also liked the way you used commas within your sentences - well done! Keep up the great work :-) Mrs McGuinnity (Team 100wc)
Liam - this is an excellent 100wc which I really enjoyed reading. You used the prompt in an imaginative way and also used heaps of descriptive language - well done!
ReplyDeleteMr K :-)
I agree with Mr K! How did you use this prompt so imaginatively!? Also some great language like Mr K said! Well done!
ReplyDeleteJust a few things though:
You forgot a full-stop at the end of your story and a few spelling mistakes.
Other than that a fabulous piece of writing! :)
Hi Liam! I loved your story. It was very imaginative, and I could just picture the Professor's excitement as he plugged in the machine he had been working on for so long.
ReplyDeleteYour writing is nice and neat too! Well done!
Liam, I agree with all the other comments, this was a great 100wc. You used some super description but I also liked the way you used commas within your sentences - well done!
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great work :-)
Mrs McGuinnity (Team 100wc)