Tuesday 8 May 2012

Sam B's 100wc - week 29:

Dear Diary,
Today was a marvellous day because I woke up and it was my birthday. Hurray !!   I got dressed raced downstairs and had a full English Breakfast. Yum! The weird thing was Mum wouldn't let me see outside. Boy I got a shock when she opened the door. There was loads of presents, there was a bouncy castle, a fluffy bunny rabbit with a pink collar.  Straight away I kicked my shoes off and bounced on my castle. Then I gave my bunny some juicy spinach leaves. The time flew by and soon it was time for my party to start. How lucky am I!

By Sam B.

6 comments:

  1. What a delightful story Sam! Sounds like a great way to spend a birthday. I loved your descriptions of the bouncy castle and the fluffy bunny. Keep up the good work.

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  2. Hello Sam. This sounds like a really fun birthday. I liked the details like "kicked off my shoes" and "time flew by".

    A little tip for next time: if you leave out the things the reader knows you must have done like "I woke up", you will have more words to use on your descriptions.

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  3. I really like your 100wc it was very cool. :D
    -Esha

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