Dear Diary,
Today was a marvellous day because I woke up and it was my birthday. Hurray !! I got dressed raced downstairs and had a full English Breakfast. Yum! The weird thing was Mum wouldn't let me see outside. Boy I got a shock when she opened the door. There was loads of presents, there was a bouncy castle, a fluffy bunny rabbit with a pink collar. Straight away I kicked my shoes off and bounced on my castle. Then I gave my bunny some juicy spinach leaves. The time flew by and soon it was time for my party to start. How lucky am I!
By Sam B.
What a delightful story Sam! Sounds like a great way to spend a birthday. I loved your descriptions of the bouncy castle and the fluffy bunny. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteHello words from moon!
DeleteHello Sam. This sounds like a really fun birthday. I liked the details like "kicked off my shoes" and "time flew by".
ReplyDeleteA little tip for next time: if you leave out the things the reader knows you must have done like "I woke up", you will have more words to use on your descriptions.
Thank you Sally.
DeleteI love it.
ReplyDeleteI really like your 100wc it was very cool. :D
ReplyDelete-Esha