Saturday 5 May 2012

Isaac's 100wc - week 29:

One marvellous day, I was standing where birds flew elegantly over the luscious, green countryside. Noisily, rabbits dug burrows in the fine soil, despite hating getting dirty! Pink, fluffy plants lay motionless on the wet, soggy leaves. Ancient castles stood victoriously above the clouds like angels hovering beautifully. Stoats swiftly move through the long, thin grass in search of nimble hares to eat. Gracefully, butterflies soar silently, stopping at every plant to collect pollen. Finally, great deer sprint through the trees, where the males wrestle with their antlers. I was happy there, and I wished I could stay there forever.
By Isaac.

9 comments:

  1. Isaac - this is an utterly gorgeous piece of writing! You should be VERY proud of yourself - I'm totally blown away by it!
    Happy teacher :-)

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  2. Hello Isaac,

    I am not visiting your wonderful 100WC entry as a member of Team 100WC, although I may find you're in the group I check. I saw a link to your story and thought I'd have a look as a member of the public.

    I can see you have used all of the prompt words in writing an excellent story. You describe the scene and events in the story so well. From your description, I can understand why you would want to stay and why I would like to visit such a wonderful place.

    Well done!

    @RossMannell
    Teacher, NSW, Australia

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    1. Thankyou! That's very kind of you!

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  3. Wow Isaac, this is a great piece of writing. You have used the prompts very creatively. Lots of adverbs in there too!
    Remember to keep it in the same tense all the way through.

    Well done. I always like reading your work on the blog.
    Mrs P

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  4. Well done Isaac on your 100 WC, you have painted a picture in my head of your scene which is a great thing to be able to do.
    Mrs Lee
    Galley Hill

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  5. Sarah (Team 100WC)9 May 2012 at 18:29

    Isaac, this is brilliant work, and sets the scene for a much longer story. You have done well with both the technical and creative aspects of your story.

    I'm not surprised you have a happy teacher!

    Sarah (Team100WC)

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  6. Thanks for commenting on my post. I like your guess about Bugatti Veyron :)

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  7. Thank you so much for commenting on my blog. It warms my heart and I really appreciate that. :D

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