“Wow at last Moby, at last. We’ve found it.” As Moby and I were searching for the golden treasure for three years, we had finally reached it. The shine of gold blinded us as we opened the tatted lid, the walkie-talkie rang.
“Have you found the treasure yet?” asked our smarty boss, “Hello, are you there?” There was no answer from us, only the gross duel all over the treasure. Suddenly a loud dressed up man, came by and pulled us away…
“Were are we?” I asked Moby. But were where we? A deep dark cave it looked like… To be continued…
By Charlotte.
Very good Charlotte I was on the eg of my seat!
ReplyDeleteWell done Charlotte, a very good 100wc! I like how your boy telling Moby to hurry up, it's like he's a bit lazy!
ReplyDeleteOops, forgot to add in the 'the!' Sorry!
DeleteHi Charlotte,
ReplyDeleteWhat an exciting 100WC! This is a great sentence: "The shine of gold blinded us as we opened the tatted lid". Great post!
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Tim and Moby
A very exciting entry into the 100WC. Charlotte, your descriptive writing is great. I had a chuckle over the 'smarty boss' and loved the suspenseful ending. Good work!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for commenting on my blog post about iPads, Charlotte. It really meant a lot to me.
ReplyDeleteWow Charlotte- Your 100WC is A-M-A-Z-I-N-G(© Isaac!) I love the way that you have described the gold,'The shine of the gold blinded us as we opened the tatted lid...'
ReplyDeleteGreat work, keep it up! :-)
Hi, Charlotte! I can't wait to find out what happenes next. This adventurous story is awesome.
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