I found this to be a well written story from the first sentence. Your descriptions of scenes and events works to paint pictures in the minds of readers. I can also see you have used the prompt effectively. Well done. :)
Life for an orphan in an orphanage would not be easy but, for these two boys, Mr. and Mrs. Smith offer hope.
What an endearing storyline describing a wonderful new start for your character and his siblings. I'm sure that on such an important day you would remember every little detail just as your character describes such as the miserable room at the orphanage and the sun shining down as he got ready for the new life ahead. I really like the way you have used the challenge prompt within your final sentence, so effective.
This is a fabulous 100wc and I look forward to reading more of your work, so please keep entering.
Hello Sam,
ReplyDeleteI found this to be a well written story from the first sentence. Your descriptions of scenes and events works to paint pictures in the minds of readers. I can also see you have used the prompt effectively. Well done. :)
Life for an orphan in an orphanage would not be easy but, for these two boys, Mr. and Mrs. Smith offer hope.
I hope you keep entering the 100WC.
@RossMannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher, NSW, Australia
I like your 100 word challenge
ReplyDeleteHello Sam,
ReplyDeleteWhat an endearing storyline describing a wonderful new start for your character and his siblings. I'm sure that on such an important day you would remember every little detail just as your character describes such as the miserable room at the orphanage and the sun shining down as he got ready for the new life ahead. I really like the way you have used the challenge prompt within your final sentence, so effective.
This is a fabulous 100wc and I look forward to reading more of your work, so please keep entering.
Mrs Shaw (Team 100wc)
I like your 100 word challenge that you wrote.
ReplyDeletea very good work sam fill stop and punctuation
ReplyDeleteWow Sam, what an A-MAZ-ING 100wc! I love the idea of an orphan being fostered, where did you get it from?
ReplyDeleteThe ending is a bit confusing, other than that a floor-less piece of writing
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Thank you for commenting on my blog SamG. (and SamB. He did it with you) I really appreciate that. Tell SamB that to, okay. :D
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