The ground slowly parted...
A nuclear disaster might have occured, or maybe the earth is beginning to split in two. Well I know what is going to happen.
The world will be taken over by the underground people and humans will be killed! Of course, animals as well, in fact every living thing will be destroyed by the evil underground people.
I was petrified when the ground started to shake and split into two, I was petrified...
By Oscar.
Ash Class - Year Five - Greenfields Primary School.
Goodness me Oscar! I do hope those underground people are in your imagination & not real!! It is super to see your work being shared on the 100WC!
ReplyDeleteCould you ask your teacher to get in touch please either by leaving a comment on the 100WC.net or via twitter @theheadsoffice
Thank you!
hi oscar great story
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DeleteMr Kenyon, Ash Class.
Hi Oscar,
ReplyDeleteI like the suspense in your story. I also like that used the word "petrified" instead of "scared."
Good job.
4amWriter/Team 100WC
Oscar, I love this story is so,well (I can't really explain how good it is!! Lol)
ReplyDeleteIt's just A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!!!!
From Molly Xx :)
like the comment!
DeleteHello Oscar, I like the start of the story and the end .I mostly like the part when it say's "I was petrified when the ground started to shake and split in two ,I was petrified..." Great work keep it up!
ReplyDeletecool story real enjoyed it
ReplyDeleteNice story Oscar, love the cliff hanger!
ReplyDeleteOscar that was amazing i wish i could read lots more IT WAS GREAT!!
ReplyDeletedid you by any chance copy callums name?
DeleteWow! Wow! Wow! All I can say is Wow! Your class is very, very, very creative. I love all the CREATIVITY in this story. Bravo. Hats off!
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