My feet crunched through the undergrowth of Vines Wood. I knew I was being followed, I kept on hearing footsteps padding behind me, every time I stopped, they stopped. Suddenly, there was a deafening squeal. The noise was terrifying but I soon realised it was just my mind making up things. I look around, and all that I can see is trees, they’re surrounding me. I shut my eyes, hoping that everything will go away. I was right, everything did go away. Now, I’m in complete darkness. No one to see, nothing to do. I’m slowly dying, I’m fading away…
By Molly
By Molly
Is it to be continued because if it is I am craving to see what happens next. This is a very, very, very adventurous story Molly. I'm very proud of you to write such an amazing story.
ReplyDeleteThanks Jessica! I'm really glad that you enjoyed reading my 100WC this week! And yes, it is going to be continued, well soon at least. :-)
DeleteHi Molly, I loved your story. It has a spooky feel but is also very emotional. After reading it I am left wondering about your character....who or what they are, and I felt a little sad for them.
ReplyDeleteReally good writing. Keep it up.
Thanks Mrs Travers! I'm overjoyed that you like my 100WC this week! My character is a little 5 year old girl called Poppi.
DeleteI can't wait to see what's happens next. :D
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DeleteWow! Great use of describtive words. I realy liked how your character was being tricked by her imagination!
ReplyDeleteThanks Zara! I thought it would make is more mysterious if I make it like her mind was tricking her!
DeleteStunning. I love it and I also love the use of description in the first sentence. So mysterious. :¬)x2
ReplyDeleteThanks Mya, I'm glad that you think its really mysterious! :-)
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